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Dee's July Post

7/24/2014

4 Comments

 
ANACHRONISM

Stranded between two worlds

Admiration, curiosity,

glimpses of wonders

barely credible.

I stand tentative

as in a dream

unable to go forward

            such frustration, anger,

a limited vision

assails my mind

            O to open up that vista

to clear and spreading

brave new world.


But I am older

than this present time,

an artefact laid down

in olden days,

antiquated and forbidden,

displaced, disqualified,

an anachronism.



Yet I have seen

creation come to pass

in fifty years

a whole new world begin.

Space is diminished,

speed has eaten time,

communication instant,

and all knowledge here

right at my fingertips.



But I prefer to

see you face to face;

pick up a book

enjoy the tale it tells;

relax between the truth

of sky and trees;

look up to feel the sun upon my face

not down upon a square of empty space.

©Deanne Lister

1st July 2014 

4 Comments
Judy
7/24/2014 04:06:18 pm

You have some super lines here Dee.
'I am older than this present time'

and 'speed has eaten time'.

Love your insight, even if I can't agree with all sentiments expressed.

To have all knowledge at my fingertips, there's true enlightenment.

Judy

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Dee
7/27/2014 05:31:45 pm

Thanks for your comments, Judy. I agree, you're not an anachronism like I am!

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Lyn
7/30/2014 08:05:35 pm

Like Judy, I think the best line is 'speed has eaten time'. Initially this seems a sad poem, a reflection on being left behind, but by the final stanza I was comforted by the positive images. 'Square of empty space' - they can all keep that, I'll go for open landscapes every time. If I can suggest a couple of words that might be left out, I would omit the 'an' before anachronism. It is clumsy to read aloud. I would also prefer 'space diminished', rather than 'is diminished'. Just minor quibbles though. Nice reflective poem.

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Michael
8/2/2014 07:12:53 pm

I agree with Lyn. At first, this poem appeared to be about something quite melancholy! However the las t few stanzas definitely lightened the mood, and made me chuckle a bit! I love the unique phrases you used to describe yourself such as 'an artefact laid down' and other lines in that stanza.
Well done with this poem, Dee, and I look foward to reading more of your work in the future! I do find it quite ironic, however, that you posted this poem on a poetry WEBSITE! :) Michael

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