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I'd like some comments on the following styles for the same poem. Which one works best? Blood on the sand soldier crabs emerge scurry for safety dig in—confuse the enemy beyond the beachhead wet sand gleams—shimmers-- collapses into distant haze I dawdle in the sun—scuff tidemarks idly-- battle plans drawn there’s sand between my toes seagulls hover—intelligence drones bold eyes assessing fisherman? forager? interest wanes—wings tilt-- new heading back to base-- glide to safe landing sandhills deploy-- a khaki army marches through occupied territory white tops attack—withdraw engage frenetic action-- foam missiles spray black rocks appear—higher ground command position-- send out a scout—advance concealed oyster shard mine-- a careless step—a sudden hurt-- blood flows as on other sands-- blends with salt water-- is washed away wounded I retreat gulls’ legs skitter before me red as the blood on the sand A poem composed on an early morning beach walk. I was thinking about war poetry, and suddenly the images all around me were military in nature. The soldier crabs sent me down that path. (2012) |
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